Adapted from Jeffrey Kluger,"I Know The Truth, So Don't Bother Me With Facts". humans are easily distracted by flat out lies and rumors, and they would stick to their decisions stronger then before.
Humans are easily distracted from their own knowledge of any situation to rumors and flat out lies. R. Kelly, Garret, and Nisbet come to two horrible conclusions one of them is even in the best circumstances less than a 1/3 mostly wouldn't change their position even with evidence that was given to them. when the people get to learn the facts they still stick with their facts stronger then ever investigators are looking into peoples reaction in the different areas of the brain.
I believe that people have been raised by one truth and that is their parents, family member, or someone close to them.I'm a person if you want to convince me to believe what you believing in, you better have some extremely good evidence that would change my believe.
In conclusion, people can change their point of view on something or someone that they grow up with exact one believe. It all depends on how naïve they are to trust the person.
The summary is Ok because it has some main points. Also, development is very short and the claim doesn't have answer.
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ReplyDeleteyou have to work on structure of the response, also the essay is too short
ReplyDeleteYou have very good ideas but the essay is too short !!
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ReplyDeleteFirstly, I will like to say great job on your idea about “humans are easily distracted by flat out lies and rumors, and they would stick to their decisions stronger than before”. I agree that's a significant idea, and a good way to focus your response...I also liked how you states your personal believes.
I think you could develop some of your response, however, by give more evidence to make your essay successfully, thesis need to develop more because it did not state the answers of the entire essay and finally, your essay need to polish a little more meaning that your sentences need to expand towards your thesis.
I notice that you only have (4) short paragraphs. Perhaps you could bring in a personal story, give more ideas, state cons and pros about your thesis and expand on your argument. All of your paragraphs could be expanded. Do you think you could say more about the recording musician you mention? I also wonder what you meant by “investigators are looking into peoples reaction in the different areas of the brain”. I think that phrase might work better if you defined the meaning of it in the next sentence.
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